Chocolate Experience Writing

We have been learning to make our writing more interesting. To do this we have been 

re-crafting our writing. We used a describe map which helps plan our ideas in more detail. Our topic was Chocolate Experience Writing. Each time we used better adjectives. My favourite thing about writing like this is that we get to do heaps of writing.

As Mrs Key was breaking the squishy, melting chocolate bits my mouth was filling with sticky and disgusting saliva I couldn't wait to eat the sweltering chocolate. When I got given it, it felt like a hard brown, sticky rock that was melting of sweat and sticky slime in my hand. When I was looking at it I had seen that it looked like a half of a hard, brown cube with cool and fancy engraving on it. I decided to smell the sweltering chocolate with fancy engraving on it and guess what it made me want it even more than I wanted before because it smelt like luxurious, sweet chocolate cake. When I opened my mouth and put the fascinating brown hard rock in, I could feel the strong luxurious chocolate cake taste go into my taste buds and when I swallowed it, it exploded like a broken rocket ship exploding while It was slipping and sliding down my dry throat.